It needs a lot of improvement. The animation along with the voice overs were not that desirable. the plot was ok though. i get what you're trying to convey but it wasn't really clear. I mean, i'm assuming your still new to this (i am too and i got the same criticism) so you shouldn't stop at this and take my advise to consideration. if you try to apply yourself more and try your best to improve everything, you could make something amazing but you need more time
I'm going to be honest with you, It does seem to need a lot of work, time, and planning on it. It just seems so random and odd (but i like odd things though) I will say, your aanimating skills are good though. I loved how you made the camel heads do the 3D spin thing. There is always room for improvement though :) I bet if you take your time and plan it out, you can make something amazing, but for now, i have to give it 2 out of 5.
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